Hey all,

Been here on and off for years. I used to love reading wam/sploshing games show story's and to be honest game shows is probably what got me into loving wam/sploshing in the first place.

I have wanted to write my own story for years but never really got round to it until now.

This is my first time doing anything like this so the writing is not going to be great or anything but thought i would share.

It's a choose your own adventure 3rd person story.

https://chyoa.com/story/The-Messy-Gauntlet.46653

There may be mistakes, there may be bad spelling but hopefully some of you enjoy it.

Feedback is welcome good and bad

This is amazing! However, the losers lair section doesn't show up! I keep getting an error message? Just a brutal tease at the end lol

It means I messed something up linking it haha

Here is a direct link if you know the flow you took to get the error let me know I will sort it

https://chyoa.com/chapter/Losers-Lair.1192543

Should be all sorted now

Until another error appears haha

First time troubles.

Still broken when I click to have brittany go to losers lair

Think I have fixed it now haha

Ah tech support of my first story not what I expected haha.

Linking everything up appears to be harder than I expected haha

Please let me know if anything else is broken and I will jump right on it

Minor tech issues aside, I hope you plan to write more this is really great!

So it was not until I had started writing I found the help page about scores and locked chapters. I really want to do something with that. Eg get x score means y happens and I see that I can also allow the reader to pick names/descriptions of the characters.

I want to give it another go using some of these elements but this one took me nearly 2 weeks to get right and still had some issues so not sure adding in more complexity will help me haha

Seems to have had a good few readers tho which is nice

It's great to see more authors giving the CYOA format a try! It was certainly an enjoyable read, although I'd love to see a bit more variety in the endings in future projects.

Really enjoyed this, thank you

Great writing and I love the CYOA style! x

Thanks

It will be a few weeks away but I have already started on my next story this time you can pick the girls who will play and some of their clothing/style etc.

Will let you all know how it goes

I think this was due to me getting impatint and confused by the end. As my orignal plans was to have 2 forks totally differant but it all got very confusing.

I have already started my new story using variables for the story so I am hoping this will allow me to track things better and give a number of endings rather than being forced to the single ending.

Some people may of noticed that the original ending was always ment to get one girl losing with another girls actions being commented on, I have changed it a bit now so its more generic but 100% I want more variation too for more writings

Start your 2 week countdown now haha

This pic attached will kinda give you an idea of how these variables work and they follow you all dueing the story.

I can also track win/lose so I think it should be better next time

Great imagination, great storyline
I wish I get to see something like this in real life
Thanks for sharing

I liked it and look forward to your next one

Really enjoyed the story and the cyoa element. The games you came up with were excellent as well- plenty of underwear filling!

Would love to see a bit more chance for variation in the story, but judging from your recent replies, you're already working on that. Can't wait to see what you come up with next.