Tilly said: Really enjoyed that, you're a good writer! I could totally picture myself in her shoes.
I thought it tailed off a bit at the end - 6 pies in quick succession with no explanation and then sex seemed tacked on; but that's my only criticism.
Thanks! Great criticism; and I think I'll write out that section a bit more. Describing how she reels from each of the six pies, trying to keep her balance under the (very enjoyable) pie barrage would be great.
Love you, too
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