My feedback for what its worth
I bought the film at $3.99
I really like the idea of plot and build up / context in general.
I do agree with the other posters that a totally unwamrelated dog poo drinking bit doesn't get you in the right mood at all.
My suggestion would be NOT to lose the idea of humour and story but to make them very much wam related (as indeed you do in the next scene). I'd also lose the distracting background music.
Once we get into the first slapstick scene things pick up enormously. Being totally honest I'm much more a fan of the young natural look, so this scene has the advantage of just the 2 young actresses. I like their outfits too.
The dialogue IS clever and witty AND wam related WITH CLASSICS LIKE "LET ME HAVE IT" ETC.
The pie hits are generally good too though the thrower could react with more joy/laughter/any emotional reaction at all in the wide reaction shots, and the recipient needs to stand still to take the pie, but this is me being picky. It's a very nice scene. The last scene is very good too, though for such a tightly scripted story there is no context as to why the girls both pie you.
I really enjoyed the video overall, but being brutally honest MOST people will probably buy their clips based on the attractiveness of the models and the amount of nudity and pieing. I'm basing this on the feedback from the producers that I've read on the forums over the years, not on my own preferences.
Regardless, I would suggest your non wam related scenes are either written off financially as a labour of love if you really like doing them, or scrapped if you are looking to maximise profits, as no-one will buy a wam clip for the non-wam scenes no matter how good/well acted yet these superflous scenes will increase your costs etc.
I would recommend shorter, tighter scenes with young and atractive models and though I'm not a fan of nude wam, I understand from the producers that the big sales require at least some partial nudity.
Keep at least some plot/dialogue/gags (as YCDTOTI do) but make sure the wam as at the heart of everything. I'd also lose the background music.
I was very happy with my purchase at that price point and hope none of this seems harsh but as you have very directly asked for feedback I hope it is of use
Don't lose heart, its a crowded market place and you're relatively new
and to forum members I would heartily recommend it at $3.99 and if you are cringing at the dogmuck refs just skip through it. The pie scenes are great value at $3.99 and its definitely worth the price.
pic used by kind permission of Messy Jessie